scene for a film

topic posted Mon, February 14, 2005 - 6:06 PM by  RAB
I'm giving away this idea here because I can't incorporate it into any of my stuff. It's a sight gag which would be best done on film.


We might be watching a documentary about a writer, or someone who imagines himself a writer, and he says "I need peace and quiet to focus on my writing. I come up with some of my best ideas just relaxing in the sauna."

Cut to the man in a steambath, a towel draped over him...writing with a pen on sheets of paper. There would be a stack of fresh sheets, as well as completed pages. Another man enters, also wearing a towel.

The newcomer asks "Hey Bill, how's the new piece coming?"

"Here, have a look," the writer says, handing the newcomer his written pages. Close up on the pages and we see all the ink in blotches, running down the paper, illegible. The second guy looks at his fingers and the ink is getting on his hands as well. The paper is becoming translucent and may even be falling to shreds.


Sure, this isn't funny in description, but I think it could be very much so done visually. Free to whoever can use it!
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